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Original

Wednesday, what a terrible moment! English learning seems achieve a new standard, absolutely need to avoid my bad score. The needles of clocks conform the rule made by human, they run millions of years and I refer they would continue turn a round in long time. Life always down, we are both waiting of a choice. We trying to protect our broken heart, but disproportionate wish and truth give a serious publishment for all people who have sins. We might die in the past, most of us think lucky could save everything, but we all forget the god just help vagrant in heaven.

Modified Version

Wednesday—what a terrible moment! Learning English seems to have reached a new standard, and I absolutely need to avoid getting a bad score. The needles of clocks follow the rules made by humans; they’ve been running for millions of years, and I believe they will continue to turn for a long time. Life is always full of ups and downs, and we are both waiting for a choice to be made. We try to protect our broken hearts, but the disproportionate gap between our wishes and the truth delivers serious punishment to all people who have sinned. We might have died in the past; most of us think luck can save everything, but we all forget that God only helps the vagrants in heaven.

Suggestions for Improvement

1. Focus on Basic Grammar:
   • Study verb tenses (e.g., present perfect: “seems to have reached” vs. “seems achieve”).
   • Learn articles (“a,” “the,” or none): e.g., “waiting of a choice” → “waiting for a choice.”
   • Practice subject-verb agreement: e.g., “they run millions of years” → “they’ve been running for millions of years.”
2. Expand Vocabulary Correctly:
   • Replace misused words with correct ones (e.g., “publishment” → “punishment”).
   • Use a dictionary or thesaurus to confirm meanings and avoid guessing (e.g., “turn a round” → “turn around”).
3. Simplify Sentence Structure:
   • Break long, complex sentences into shorter ones for clarity. For example:
     • Original: “The needles of clocks conform the rule made by human, they run millions of years and I refer they would continue turn a round in long time.”
     • Revised: “The needles of clocks follow rules made by humans. They’ve been running for millions of years, and I believe they will continue to turn for a long time.”
4. Practice Writing Daily:
   • Write short diary entries (5-10 sentences) and focus on one grammar rule or vocabulary set each time.
   • Use tools like Grammarly or ask a friend/teacher to review your work.
5. Read and Listen to English:
   • Read simple books, articles, or blogs to see how native speakers structure sentences.
   • Listen to English podcasts or watch shows with subtitles to improve your phrasing and intuition.